Ffreq here, writer of http://gurochan.net/lit/res/1310.html . Of course I'm NOT forgetting about that thread, but as I suggested and people agreed, I'm also starting this one - so that I could run two stories simultaneously and double the fun. Like in that thread, I'll be writing the story part-by-part based on YOUR choices. For example, "option A: the killer throws the girl into the pool and turns on electricity; option B: the killer drowns the girl in the pool" - then I wait for a few days for your votes, and the story continues based on the votes. "A few days" actually depends on how actively you will be voting. :) THE PLOT: A killer pays really big money to all the staff of the school so that they could let him do whatever he wants. It's a private girls-only highschool (I suppose, ages from 15 to 19); all the doors can shut automatically. The teachers tell the girls that today will be the drill ("fake emergency situation, to train pupils what they should do in such situations"), so that they don't panic when all this lockdown happens. The teachers leave the classrooms at a certain time under some innocuous guise, and the doors shut - to the girls in the classes it just looks like it happened accidentally. The killer then wanders around the school; he unlocks the door, picks the girl he likes, and lures her out of the class (he can say that he's a worker of the "emergency staff" and this is an evacuation etc., so that the other girls don't suspect anything). And then he kills her, and can go back for another victim, or visit some other place in the school. The school has a lot of interesting places - classrooms, gym (with cloakroom and showers), swimming pool, library, etc. Let's DECIDE the following things: - Only realistic girls (any nationalities etc.) or maybe elf girls too? Sort of a fantasy element in it (but I don't think elfs differ TOO much from human girls in this case :) - The killer. One guy? One guy + one girl (going to different parts of the school, not sticking together)? The last variant lets do some F/F stuff maybe. :) - Just come up with interesting places in the school. After it's set up, I'll write the introduction ASAP.
Here's my proposal: Location: classroom A (smartest, best behaved class) Girl name: Ivy Nationality: Chinese-American Description: 5'6", silky, medium length black hair, "very acceptable" breast size; she is elegant, smart, quite popular in class, and she attracts every boy in the neighborhood; She dresses very cleanly: skirt clean, shirt pressed, top button done and necktie tied neatly at the neck, however, she leaves the shirt fully untucked (while the rest of the class dresses more neatly), and for this the (male) killer takes her out of class to punish her (which confuses the class since they thought this is an emergency drill). Death: The male killer wants to "teach her a lesson" to dress smart (but of course, just an excuse to kill her). The punishment is simple, no weapons. The killer will punch, kick, knee, and stomp on Ivy's belly until she heavily pukes blood till her death (since this is guro-chan, an inhuman amount of blood, and perhaps bits and pieces of her stomach, sounds good). How does this sound? :)
Sounds good. :) Although I'm not sure about the exact classroom, that will be a part of the story outline I think; everything else sounds pretty good. What about the initial decisions? - Only realistic girls (any nationalities etc.) or maybe elf girls too? Sort of a fantasy element in it (but I don't think elfs differ TOO much from human girls in this case :) - The killer. One guy? One guy + one girl (going to different parts of the school, not sticking together)? The last variant lets do some F/F stuff maybe. :) - Just come up with interesting places in the school.
A world with with human and elfs, that sounds fine I guess, so my girl would be HUMAN chinese-american instead of ELF chinese-american. So bump for elf. I vote for one guy + one girl, then, so when one gets into trouble he can call upon the other. But not in this case ;) Some interesting places: gym storage room, band room (what can you do with instruments?), rooftop! Perfect place, sound proof.
I vote for a world with elves or such too. The killer could be one guy and a girl, but not necesarilly working toguether, sometimes it'd be one and sosmetimes the other. I propose the killers get help from some of the teachers (who should all be female if you ask me) such as the chemistry teacher in the lab, gym and/or fencing teacher in the gym, the nurse in the infirmary... Maybe the teachers themselves could be the victim at times, when the killer gets over eager. As for places, I imagine the school has a kitchen, maybe the gym has javelins, weights, ropes... Maybe there's a small museum in the school (it's a big schol, right?), with old weapons and torture instruments. There's the labs too. There's the infirmary too. Maybe the killer can come in when the girls are in the showers in the gym so he can pick them while naked, much to the confused girls' shame.
The elf girls... I think they should be almost like humans, I mean, little difference. Sensitive longer ears (but not long like in Warcraft, just a little bit more sharp), maybe just a little bit stronger, but with more tender intimate parts (both in pain and pleasure), maybe stronger orgasms (if there will be such things in the story :). Generally, "almost like humans", I don't want them to be much taller or older than "usual" girls. The killers. The reason why I wanted a girl killer too is maybe a bit strange. :) Those who read the other thread I started, could have noticed that I'm a fan of nude-art (nude-art is, how to say, good quality erotic; not shitty glamour over-photoshopped Playboy thing, but not unprofessional photos on the other side. Studios like Met-Art, Femjoy, MPL if these names tell you something :); you can see that I was using some photos as "examples of how the girls could look like". And there's a model whom I adore much, you can call it being a fan. She's beautiful, and I can't imagine her being a victim. But then, she can be a killer. :) Here are a few pics: http://s60.radikal.ru/i168/1007/96/0ddc4f07cb87.jpg and http://s07.radikal.ru/i180/1007/44/6e90902a6c66.jpg and http://i067.radikal.ru/1007/ed/fd444e203945.jpg - nude photos http://s49.radikal.ru/i126/1007/fb/3a278b0fd031.jpg and http://s005.radikal.ru/i210/1007/cf/0f9aca3b2849.jpg - semi-clothed http://s61.radikal.ru/i174/1007/3d/58de39becc12.jpg and http://s004.radikal.ru/i206/1007/bb/51ed3466ab2f.jpg - clothed Generally, if talking about the presence of teachers... Well, my original idea was that the killer is someone rich, but not well-known, not a star or smth. Maybe he got his wealth from his parents. And he was obsessed with an idea of doing this massacre; he finds a person who shares his idea (this girl) and they decide to do it together. Actually I thought that teachers leave the school completely, because the thought of someone being in a room together with the killer and the victim, someone who's been paid to let it happen, isn't what I thought originally. The killers are, how to say, "intelligent killers", not just crazy butchers, they want to do the job clearly. But I'll think of your suggestions and how to incorporate it in the story, so never say never. :) And about the showers - my thoughts exactly. ;)
I think the killer lured the teachers (who are all beautiful youngish women) somewhere into some designated room or something and locked them there with a couple crowbars and a cctv through which they can watch the students getting killed. at first the killer / killers (I vote for 2 one male, one female) simply stalk and dispatch the oblivious students but eventually the teachers (armed with crowbars) break out and the real game begins. The few remaining students, told of the danger they are in by their teachers start actively hunting the hunters and it becomes a gory brutal game of cat and mouse between sall groups of the teachers and remaining students vs. the increasingly devious killers who have by now planted bombs and booby traps around the school
Well as I said, I want to at least start as a "clean job". You know, things like accuracy, gloves, etc. - sort of a heist-styled thing. Of course it won't be an interesting story if someone doesn't get out of control, I understand it and it will surely happen - but as I said, I doubt that they at first paid the teachers money, and then locked them all. It's kinda strange... Well alright, I'll at least start with a story outline that I originally planned, and then we'll see how it will go.
Sounds like a very interesting concept, and I approve. I think it's probably better if the teachers are paid off, rather than trapped - it's cleaner, and meaner. Plus it gives the opportunity for one or more to have second thoughts and come back to try and save the day.
Alright, so as people voted on the "initial settings" unanimously, let's go... ------------------------------------------------------------- It's a strange feeling... You come up with an idea. You get obsessed with it. You make a plan, think it over and over, until everything seems ideal. And now, after almost a year of working on it, it will happen. The very thought of it sends chills down your spine... I was driving the car to the school. Jane was in the passenger seat, briefly looking through the maps of the school. Jane wasn't her real name, like John wasn't mine. No real names while we're here, only John and Jane. And two bags for us with everything we need. I drove through the gate of the school, taking a brief look at the gatekeeper in the rearview mirror. He went out, closing the gate from the other side, but so that it could be opened from the inside, and began to walk away... Yes, we paid him too. 100 000 USD to everyone, and 200 000 to the school headmaster. It's funny that you can shut someone's mouth by money... I slowly drove to the parking lot. 11:52. One by one, the teachers were coming out of the school, some just walking away, some going to their cars and driving from here - as if our car wasn't here. As if we were ghosts... Or maybe they were ashamed to look?.. In just few minutes, no one was left inside. Only our victims... The doors shut at 11:50, leaving the girls trapped inside many rooms. It was Jane's idea to make the teachers' disappearing look normal. "Girls, I'll be back in a minute, I'll just go into the other class for a marker, mine exhausted," - the teacher walks out, and seconds later the door shuts. Looks like a coincidence, doesn't it? In every class, the girls are sure that the teacher is just outside the door, in the corridor. Oh, if they only knew the truth... "It's time, John," - my partner smiled and got out of the car, reaching for her bag in the backseat. We were both wearing jackets with "State Emergency Squad" on them, making us both look pretty innocent. At least we hoped so... We approached the school's main entrance. It was convenient that the parking lot wasn't seen from any of the classes where the girls were today. Otherwise, what was happening here would seem suspicious to the girls. As we entered, I shut the door manually. So quiet... It was very quiet in the school. Perhaps because the heavy doors in the classes badly transmit the sounds... The only sound was the announcement on the loudspeaker. "Everyone keep calm. This is a drill. Wait patiently for the State Emergency Squad members and follow their insctructions." No security guards, no cleaners, no one. Just our victims. 11:59. "John, remember? Get in touch every hour," - Jane pointed at her cell phone. I nodded. "Good luck, Jane. Have fun," - I smiled and went to the right staircase from the entrance with a bag in my hand, while my partner went the other way... ------------------------------------------------------------- So here is the first vote! Where will John go? (I'm following his actions first) Option A. To the small classroom with 2nd grade students (age 16-17). They were having their usual history lesson when the lockdown happened. In there, John might pick up the girl as anonymous described in >>2. Option B. To the library, where girls from different grades were at the time of the lockdown. Library has complicated forking paths between the book shelves, so the kill can happen right there if John can silence the girl. If you vote for this option, you can also suggest the girl if you want, or maybe the way to kill her. VOTE! ------------------------------------------------------------- Little notice: I forgot to describe the grades; 1st grade students are age 15-16, 2nd - 16-17, 3rd - 17-18, 4th - 18-19. But as there are many girls in this school, of course there are several 1st grade classes, several 2nd grade classes etc.
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Sorry I keep messing up on typing...basically the 2 deleted posts comes down to this: I strongly vote for option A
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I also vote for A.
Victim Proposal Asha and Tamara 3rd level (18 year old) Arab - American twin sisters 5'9" long black hair, large breasts, soft brown eyes, darkly tanned skin (picture twin Rima Fakihs http://www.nydailynews.com/entertainment/galleries/miss_michigan_rima_fakih_is_crowned_miss_usa_2010/miss_michigan_rima_fakih_is_crowned_miss_usa_2010.html) Tamara is more conservative than Asha and has slightly longer hair, slightly smaller breasts and is slimmer and weaker. Tamara is also a virgin while Asha has a reputation as a slut. Both girls are wearing bikinis of different colors and assorted jewelry. fate: they are in a steam room located near the gym showers they get trapped inside in the sweltering heat and informed that only one of them will be let out. If one of them does not kill the other they will both be left to be steamed / cooked to death. Tamara goes to the door and tries to reason with the killer. Asha, desperate to escape sneaks up behind tamara and strangles her with her own bikini top while ocking her for dying a virgin. The killer lets asha out and offers to let her live in exchange for sexual favors but after sex betrays her mutilating and dissemboweling her with a machete. The killer then forces the dying asha to watch as tamara's corpse is deflowered.
Bump for the new victim proposal, and bump for option A.
Victim proposal is good. Although probably except the very last sentence; I'm not a fan of necrophilia to be completely honest (but it doesn't include DYING girls, not DEAD). And I can't promise that it will be the very next victim after this first one, but I'll surely include it. :) Tonight, I think, will be the first kill.
okay then, how about this: Tamara was only unconscious not dead because Asha botched the strangling. The killer uses this fact as an opportunity to turn on Asha (he was going to anyway, but he uses this as a justification when he curses asha out while hacking at her at the machete) then he forces the mortally wounded asha to watch him rape and slit the throat of her virgin sister while tamara sobs uncontrollably both at her own violation and her sisters betrayal... oh and I vote A btw
So... Alright, here we go. One little thing I want to notice - I'm open for girls suggestions etc., but sometimes I'll think of a victim myself. Sort of... I just don't want to be a writer for someone's ideas, but to come up with ideas myself too. :) How to say, describing not only what others like most, but also what I like most too. And those who come up with suggestions about girls, don't forget, we have elves here too. :) -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I went up the staircase to the next floor, walking into an empty corridor and looking around... Nobody here. I took a map out of my bag to check the locked classroom doors along it... Alright. Class 2A is right here... I walked slowly to the locked door near me, feeling my heart beating faster that usually. My victims are right here, right behind this door... I quickly checked through the files of the girls in this class. We had all the information we needed. Names, photos, descriptions... I stopped at Ivy Wong, studying her file for some seconds. Yes, she looks like a good choice... Putting the papers except for one blank sheet back into the bag and leaving it in the corner of the corridor, I took the keys and slowly opened the door... 10 girls, who were sitting there and chatting for the lack of a better occupation, turned to me. I smiled as friendly as I could. "Hi girls, do you know about today's drill?" Everyone nodded. "Well, here it is, we're simulating a situation of a city evacuation. So we're gonna evacuate you one by one with a registration. I think it's going to take some time, so please be patient, okay?" I quickly looked at each girl. "Well the faster we start, the sooner we'll finish, so let's go... You maybe?" I pointed to Ivy, who was sitting in the first row closest to the door. How convenient - to the girls, it would seem I don't have any order, just picking a random girl... "You're... Ivy Wong, right?" - I pretended to look into some papers, although it was a purely blank sheet. The girl nodded, standing up and coming closer to me. Ideally clean skirt, pressed shirt that is left loose over the skirt... She looked very neatly. "I'll come for the next soon, please just be patient," - I told the girls and let Ivy out. And locked the door again. "Nobody here?" - Ivy said with a little surprise in her voice, looking at an empty corridor. "Yes," - I answered mildly, - "How we're doing it is maybe slow, but makes sure there is no panic... This is how it should be done if there's a real emergency," - I touched her back, directing her past the staircase. I wanted to lead her around the corner there, where there were no classrooms and hopefully nobody could hear her scream, although the heavy doors already were helping me in it. "We need to go right there, there's the coordination center..." I was walking behind her, looking at her back and clenching my fists. "Ivy, why do you leave your shirt over your skirt?" - "Err, and what's wrong with it?" - she turned to me with a surprise on her face, going into the small hall past the corner... "Because it's not fucking neat!" - I rudely pushed her towards the wall and right as she slammed into it, kneed her hardly in her stomach, causing her to gasp for air and bend from pain... "You wear everything else so clean and accurate, why do you leave it like that?!" - another knee to her belly, and she screamed, trying to grab my hands and push me away from her. "What are you... Help!" - the girl screamed, trying to fight me off. "What? Louder, please," - I smiled and slammed my fist right into her solar plexus, causing her to literally gulp air and fall to her knees. "Nobody can hear you, darling, these doors are too thick," - I laughed and, walking around the kneed girl in a circle, suddenly kicked her in the stomach again, which made her moan from pain and fall to the floor, putting hands on her belly as if that could protect her... "Doesn't feel that good, right?" - another kick from the side to her stomach, causing her to utter a stifled scream and roll onto her back, curling to at least protect her belly with her legs... In such position, her panties could easily be seen under her green not very long skirt. "You bitch, only whores let others see their panties!" I kicked her in the exposed butt - very lightly, just to make her stretch her legs instinctively and expose her white shirt with marks from my boots on it... And right as she did it, I stomped on her belly as hard as I could, making the girl literally howl from pain, but the next second cough hardly... I could already see tears in her eyes, but could that stop me? Her shirt was now crumpled and dirty, exposing a little bit of her bare belly. And I stomped her once again, hardly, stepping right on her stomach, causing the girl to vomit out what she had for breakfast, mixed with some blood... "There you go, sweetheart... Vomiting isn't of very good manners, right? Well at least you match now; you match that fucking not tucking your shirt!" This time, I literally jumped on her belly with one leg... I bet the girl would utter a terrific scream, but she couldn't, as blood poured from her throat heavily, as I jumped right onto her stomach... "How can you be so dirty?" - I yelled, stomping on the girl again, which made her puke blood even more, since I was pretty sure I had already torn apart her stomach... My next kick probably broke a few of her ribs, as I clearly heard the crack, and Ivy sort of moaned, choking in her own blood and reaching for her chest... "Oops. Sorry, didn't mean to do that," - I smiled, looking into her eyes as she was twitching on the floor and choking with her blood... The tender skin on her belly was already red and bruised from my execution, the girl was slowly trying to roll to her side to at least be able to breathe as the blood couldn't let her do it. "Goodnight, bitch," - I whispered, before stepping a few steps away and then kicking her from a run so strongly her body even flied a meter away on the floor, leaving a bloody trace on it as the girl vomited blood even more heavily than before, it was just pouring from her mouth together with some red flesh, I believe it was her torn apart stomach... Ivy was still struggling, she was trying to breath, but in vain - her throat was occupied with blood and flesh from inside her... Some seconds later it was over, I could no longer see the struggle in her eyes. They were just looking at some point on the floor, which was now splattered with her blood... "It was nice to meet you," - I smiled and stepped back, checking if I stepped in blood accidentally, but my steps were clean. My jacket was clean too, apparently... Clean work. And a nice place... Unless I lure another girl here, nobody else could see this from any class. Oh, speaking of another girls... I slowly walked back to the corridor where we came from and where I left my bag. I wonder if I should pick another girl from the same class?.. There were many beautiful ones, and if I want the next victim to not suspect anything, maybe I should lure her out as soon as possible?.. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- POLL 1: WHAT NOW? Option A. John picks another victim from the same classroom. Otherwise, if he goes anywhere else, the girls in this classroom will feel that it takes too long and will probably suspect something when he returns later. So if he wants the next victim to be from the same class, he must pick her NOW, not later. The girl: partly my idea, partly yours. I want her to be an elf with blonde hair, and I remind you that elves have quite sensitive intimate parts (so maybe cuntbusting, etc.) Anything else about this girl (appearance or maybe preferencies in killing) is up to your suggestions. Option B. John decides to visit a small doctor's room. Of course there's a bigger infirmary, as suggested by Anonymous, but there's also a small doctor's office. Girls come there for minor reasons, like "I've got a headache today, give me some pills and a permission to not go to lessons today". Right now, there's only one girl inside and no one else - so the kill can happen right there. The girl: also, partly my idea, partly yours. A human girl, caucasian, red hair. Anything else in description (including why is she here - headache? simulation? maybe she's half naked on the couch because of the doctor's examination?) is up to you, too. -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- P.S. 1. Anonymous >>16 please explain what you mean by "steam room located near the gym showers" (just explain what it, well, does and what it's for and how could the pupils be in there in their bikinis). Just to make things clearer. Just because English isn't my native language so I could have just not properly understood what you meant. P.S. 2. Just wanted to warn - I think there are two big areas in the school where the girls aren't wearing the uniform - the gym (sportswear of all kinds), together with the cloakroom, showers etc; and the swimming pool (also cloakroom, showers...) I want one killer to go into one of these places, and another - into another place. So maybe let's decide who goes where to avoid suggestions contradicting each other. So also POLL 2: THE FREE-CLOTHING PLACES Option A: John goes to the gym (and also its cloakroom, showers etc), Jane - to the swimming pool (also with cloakroom, showers and stuff) Option B: John goes to the swimming pool, Jane - to the gym (note: not right now, a little bit later; just to avoid contradictions in the suggestions) -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- So, vote! Poll A is about where John goes and whom he kills (including girl descriptions). Poll B is about John or Jane goes to gym or swimming pool later (to avoid contradictions). Go!
>>19 Oh, I was typing the story so I didn't see the reply. Okay, that's good. :) One more little note: of course the killers don't plan to kill EVERY girl in every class. They only take those who they like; and then later, in the very finale, they just put poisonous gas into the vent to kill off everybody else.
I am the anon. who originally suggested Asha / Tamara, sorry i got lazy and didn't put in my usual user name I was picturing a sauna near the gym where girls could relax in the steam after swimming or working out. Of course the temperature / humidity control is located outside of the sauna in this school so the girls can be trapped inside and threatened with higher levels of heat than the human body can tolerate http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sauna#Modern_saunas
Ah, I understand now, I know what sauna is. :) Yes, that's a nice idea. One last thing about it: probably the killer badly injures Asha, but rapes only Tamara? Just because, you know, raping one girl, probably even cumming into her, and then another girl right away doesn't seem very... hm, realistic to me.
two possabilities. 1 asha is in the process of giving the killer a blowjob when tamara starts to move, outrages that tamara is still alive, the killer interupts the blowjob to hack asha to pieces, finishes in tamara and asha has died fro her wounds by time tamara is raped and killed 2 the female killer is used so multiple orgasms are ore plausible. in this scenario the wounded tamara is deflowered first with the killers fingers, then the machete
Poll A: option A, and I like the elf idea, and since Ivy had her shirt untucked, I guess this girl has it tucked in? I don't know how that can play out for the kill though, up to you! Poll B: Option A
Alright, Poll A: I also vote Option A, and suggest taking advantage of sensistivity by doing something that starts minor and slowly ramps up to horrible. I dunno what, exactly - fire, electricity, tiny cuts across her body, something like that. Poll B: Option B.
and since Ivy had her shirt untucked, I guess this girl has it tucked in? I don't know how that can play out for the kill though, up to you! Yes, maybe. :) Although the killer doesn't REALLY think that untucked shirt is something awful or that "only whores let others see their panties", it was just to "pick some reason" to beat the girl. So I don't think the way her shirt is will really matter this time...
A, A. as for the twins I like the first suggestion in >>24
For the first poll A, (though I would also like to see the other death scene used at some point), For the second poll I don't really care, but I think whoever gets sent to the pool area should have the pleasure of killing the twins
Okay, one more day, and I'll continue. A lot of people are voting for "A", so if there are some certain suggestions about this elf girl or the way she dies, you're welcome to tell them. ;)
stripped and whipped across the breasts and pussy then strangled with the whip while being fingered by the killer
Due to unforeseen circumstances I'm unable to continue today, so - tomorrow. If anybody else has ideas, this is your time. :)
Sorry for the yesterday, my fellow readers - today is the kill day! Oh, and - today is probably the biggest part I've ever written. Sorry if it was TOO long, I'll try to make them a little shorter next times. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- ... After some seconds of hesitation, I reached for my bag to look at the files of the other girls in the class. Listing through them, I already almost decided to pick another classroom, when I saw the page of Eien Linelof... She looked beautiful. An elf girl, blonde, 5'8", medium breast size * ... Well, other classes can wait a little. I put the files back into the bag, looking for an appropriate murder weapon. This can do well... I took a whip and a rope out of the bag, fastening it to the back of my belt and covering it with a jacket. Not that easy to notice it, before it will be too late for the victim... I took a sheet of paper again and unlocked the classroom door. 9 girls turned to me, interrupting their chatting, just like the last time... Eien was sitting in the next seat to where Ivy was. How convenient... "Alright girls," - I showed a friendly smile and pretended to look into the list. - "We're done with Ivy, who's next... You, I think," - I pointed to Eien, who shook her shoulders and stood up from the desk. Her skirt was shorter than the one of Ivy, revealing more of her thighs... Very sexy thighs, I have to admit. Never mind, I should wait for another several seconds... "You're... Eien Linelof, right?" - "Yes," - she nodded, walking past me into the door. - "I'll be back soon," - I smiled, looking at the other girls and walking out after the girl. Locking the door behind me... "Let's go, Eien, the coordination centre is right there..." - I touched her back slightly, pointing her to the right direction. I lead her almost the same way as I did with Ivy, but this time I was luring my victim into another part of the hall, from where she couldn't see her dead friend yet... I don't want her to panic before I start my job... Walking behind her, I reached for several pieces of rope tied to my belt. And right as she was passing past the pipe on the wall, I grabbed her by her shoulders and shoved her up the wall. She screamed, trying to run away, but I was fast - in a fraction of second I appeared right in front of her and kneed her in the groin, making her scream wildly from pain and bend over, holding her belly... Whew. I haven't even kicked her in the cunt, just the groin... Hell, I love how sensitive elves are. Before she could recover from pain, I grabbed her hands and tied them to the pipe high above her head. "Help!" - it was the first thing she cried when the pain in her groin started to pass... I only laughed in her face. "Eien, maybe you haven't understood yet, but if the corridors are empty and I could just walk into the classroom and pick you, how do you think, can anybody help you?" - I paused for a couple of seconds, watching fear appear in her eyes as she was understanding the awful truth... "Now I'm gonna tie your legs, and if you only try to do something naughty, I swear I'll kick you right in the cunt. I'm pretty sure it hurts more for you..." The girl was looking at me, scared to death now. "Aaaah... So you already know how it feels, darling?" - I smiled and crouched for a few seconds to quickly tie her legs to the radiator attached to the pipe, leaving some space between them. I could hear the elf sobbing, not yet realizing what I wanted to do with her, but understanding it's gonna end very badly for her... The girl was tied reliably to the wall now, looking at me in horror with tears in her eyes. Her long ears were seen through the blonde hair, they looked so cute... A little bit longer than of humans, and with more acute end... I took a knife out of my pocket, which made the girl squeal in fear, but I smiled. "Don't worry, it's not for your body..." I came closer and reached for her shirt, undoing the buttons one by one, starting from top, and weakening her tie... "No... No, what are you... Bastard, you pervert!" I stopped that and looked in her eyes with the most ominous smile I could make. "Don't forget, Eien. If you don't obey, I'll kick you right there..." I touched her vag through the clothing of the skirt and panties, making her swallow and shut up. I finished unbuttoning her shirt, opening it wide and revealing her light-blue push-up bra... "That's nice. Is it expensive?" - I smiled, putting a knife to it and quickly cutting the clothe right between her breasts, making the girl gasp and look at me with pleading eyes... "So it was," - I laughed, reaching down for her skirt. - "You know, Eien, short skirts are nice... You have such nice thighs," - I whispered to her long ear, making her turn her head away with a disgust written on her face. - "Will you let me see them completely?" With two hands, I started to tear her skirt apart, but I had to use the knife for its belt because it was thicker. I stepped back, looking at the girl... She was now almost naked; the opened shirt didn't hide her firm breasts, and only tight white panties were keeping her intimate part hidden from my view... Her weak spot. Her weakest spot. "Come on, you bastard, rape me if you want!" - screamed the girl finally, when I was just standing there and looking at her for a minute... "No," - I laughed, coming closer to her. - "You're thinking of me much worse than I really am. I don't want to rape you... Although your hips are so tempting." I took a knife once again, this time putting it into the tight gap between her skin and panties, causing the girl to hold her breath in fear... One rapid movement of a hand - and her panties were cut in half, flowing down her legs to the floor. Exposing the tender skin of her hips... Delicate skin of her groin, where I kneed her minutes ago, and gentle pubis, covered with some blonde hair, although not much of it... "You know what I like most about your long-eared race?" - I said quietly, reaching for her breasts. I touched the left nipple with two fingers... - "The fact that you're going crazy from even little pain..." I squeezed her nipple as hard as I could, making the girl moan loudly from pain and twitching by the wall, tied reliably to it... "Yes, I mean exactly this thing," - I smiled, stepping back and taking the whip from my belt. The girl stared at it in horror... "Just for your information, Eien, I'm a master at aiming this thing exactly to where I want," - I said, swinging the whip a few times and striking the girl... She shrieked and closed her eyes instinctively, but I didn't hit her face. The whip smashed right into her left breast, leaving a red mark and causing the girl to moan even louder, clenching her teeth and trying not to scream... "Why don't you scream? Isn't it painful?" - One more swing of the whip, and it hit her right breast, right in the nipple, making Eien moan hysterically, but still not screaming... "Ah. I understand now, you need something more painful..." - I pointed my finger at her groin. The girl gazed at me, her eyes were filled with horror... "No... No, please, no! I'll do anything, please!" The swinging whip, landing right into her tender groin and leaving a red bloody mark on her skin, turned her last "please" into a loud scream, as the girl desperately tried to bend over from pain, but the rope didn't let her... "Now that's what I call pain," - I smiled, looking at the girl, as tears were flowing down her cheeks. - "Do you want more?" - "No, I beg you - aaaaaaaaaahhh!!!" - one more red line stretched on her groin, as the end of the whip slapped her hardly... Not even giving her time to catch her breath, I slapped her one more time... And more, until she uttered an absolutely wild scream, desperately twitching in her ties... Her groin was now covered in blood from several long marks of slit skin, her belly was trembling from pain... "Do you know the phrase: to save the best for the last?" - I said quietly, looking at her. The only answer was sobbing... "I fucking asked you a question!" - I swinged the whip, preparing for another blow. "Yes!!!" - she cried in horror. "That's a good girl. You should always answer the questions that you are asked." I came closer to her and touched her belly. A little higher than where the cuts were. "Then answer me one more thing. Do you know how it feels to get smacked right there?" - I moved my arm lower, touching slightly the deep cuts on her groin, which made her moan wildly, and put my hand on her pussy lips. Damn, they were so delicate and tender... I felt my cock get harder just from the very thought of it. "I ask you!" - I yelled. - "Do you know how does it feel?!" - "Yes..." - she whispered quietly, fearing me. She was now a quintessence of fear and pain... "Who did it?" - "We... we fought with a girl from another class... She's human... She kicked me there..." - the girl was crying, it was clearly hard for her to even tell this story... "Her name?" - "Anna... Anna from 2C..." I stepped back, still holding the whip in my hand. "Alright, Eien. Don't worry, Anna will suffer. Not less than you do..." I swinged the whip again, and the girl screamed loudly in horror... Oh yes, she did have what to be afraid of. The whip slashed right into her tender pussy, hitting the clit and pussy lips and turning them into a red and bloody source of the ultimate pain... The girl shrieked so loudly that for a second I worried if the girls in the classes could hear that. She uttered an absolutely wild scream, clenching her thighs tightly, as blood was literally pouring down them from her slit pussy... "One more time, Eien?" - "Noooooo!!!" I shook my shoulders and smashed the whip into her hips once again... God, this was the most desperate cry that I ever heard... The elf was almost losing her consciousness, as the terrible pain from her pussy spread around her whole body... Her thighs were now covered with fresh blood coming from the completely smashed pubis and pussy, the girl was twitching in her ties, howling wildly from the worst pain she had ever experienced... Smiling, I came closer and reached for the ties that were holding here hands. Eien fell on her knees, immediately holding her crotch with both hands and at the same time screaming even louder, as touching her wounded pussy even doubled the pain... I walked around her in a circle, then grabbing her by her shoulders and lifting into the air back onto her legs. It was a miracle she was still able to stand... In such pain, she wasn't a threat to me. I wrapped the whip around her neck, squeezing it and making the girl squeak quietly... I tightened the ends of the whip behind her neck, holding it with one hand and putting another one on her belly, just above the wounds from the whipping. The tightened whip completely deprived her of air... "Eien," - I whispered to her long ear, as she was slightly twitching in my arms, slowly choking. - "I've heard you elves have extremely strong orgasms..." My hand on her belly moved lower, and as I touched her ruined bloody pussy, she tried to scream and wiggle in my arms... It didn't help. The lack of oxygen was killing her. And she was dying in pain... I entered her pussy with two fingers, plunging them deep into her. She was still kicking in my arms in horrible pain, making choked sounds... "Too bad I can't test that on you, girl, you're in such a pain..." I began to slowly fuck her with two fingers, still choking her and feeling her agonizing twitches... It didn't take long, though. Her body was already devastated from the pain torture... I released both the whip and my embrace - and she fell down to my feet without a sound, with blood dripping from her hips to the floor. "Now, where was the..." - I took a piece of her shirt to clean my fingers carefully and stepped over her dead body. One more victim... Hell, I was starting to definitely like it. Leaving the pieces of rope hang on the radiator attached to her legs, I slowly walked away, still looking clean and innocent... Damn. It was so hot... But where should I go now? Hmm... ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- * To be honest I'm not familiar with international definition of breast sizes. If someone could explain me the numbers (like 33C) or maybe provide an example picture, I'd be appreciated. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- So, where does John go now? Option A. As suggested in the previous poll, the doctor's office. Right now, there's only one girl there, so the kill can happen right there. John can use different medicines, or maybe just the broken glass of some bulb etc. The girl: also, partly my idea, partly yours. A human girl, caucasian, red hair. Anything else in description (including why is she here - headache? simulation? maybe she's half naked on the couch because of the doctor's examination?) is up to you, too. Option B. He decides to search for the girl, Anna, whom Eien mentioned. Not that he feels sorry for Eien or whatever, but he can use that fact of that fight in pretending he "punishes" the girl. The description: Human, latino looking, 5'7", dark hair. Everything else about the description is up to you. Including the way she dies (but maybe as John reminds her of that fight, maybe some belly stabbing etc - human girls aren't so extremely sensitive about cuntbusting, but maybe smth like groin stabbing can be a reference to the painful low blow she did to Eien). Option C. Instead of John, we'll take a look for some time at Jane's actions. She is bisexual or lesbian, so killing the girls is also very arousing to her; she visits the museum. The museum isn't very popular, it's big and only several smartest girls are there now. Although smart, these girls can be quite attractive too, maybe a little too shy though. As I said, the museum is big, so Jane can kill the girl right there in one room, while the girls in the other rooms of it don't notice anything. I leave the girl description and the way she dies (remember, there are a lot of dangerous objects in the museum) up to you completely. VOTE! ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- One more thing, about elf girls' orgasms. As mentioned before, they're more strong than of human girls; I want to ask what do you think if elf girls' orgasms are so strong that they squirt? Maybe, even some REALLY strong amounts of squirt. Here's just a small pack of 5 video examples of what I mean: http://www13.zippyshare.com/v/60926539/file.html (side note: I don't care if this is real or not; I assume that for elf girls it might be real).
I'd say C, but I can't think of a description for now
I'd vote C, but i dont feel very creative. So C if someone comes up with something good, or just A. However, you wanted cup sizes. WEll, here is a chart you can use, tehy'll be donwn the pages. its an inches and centimeters, so, pick your posion i guess. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Cup_size
C, but I'd like B to happen later hopefully. I also have some unrelated suggestions. Maybe at some point someone hears a scream and the people in a room start panicking and they try to work together, but due to human nature they would naturally start fighting and causing chaos (Maybe a cell phone jammer would be necessary). That could allow for some action scenes with/without death. Also if the students don't like each other much, John/Jane could force them to pick a student to die to save the rest of their lives (whether they stick to their word is up to you). Just some ideas, I've enjoyed what you've done so far, thank you!
>>36 Yes, that's a nice idea. I'll definitely use it, just a bit later (I want to start off with several "clean" kills, visiting the "free-clothing places" (yet another several kills) and then slowly move to the things going not as planned). Alright, I see "C"s... Maybe then, if you have troubles of thinking of a way to die, you suggest a girl, and I come up with the kill method? :)
Eva : 17 year old human brunette with a fondness for ancient weapons, she is in an exhibit on the subject when she is cornered by Jane who disembowels her with a xiphos (ancient greek curved shortsword) she gets slashed horizontally across the belly and at first doesn't even realize she's been stabbed but then she sees a red stain growing across her stomach. she tears open her shirt revealing her gorgeous c-cup breasts in the process and her intestines slither out of her body as she coughs up blood and dies
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I'm here. Sorry for the long absence, I was just about to continue today (within a couple of hours). Sadly I had a very busy week plus I'm afraid that some sort of a writer's block, but the next part coming today - that's for sure.
...After some hesitation, I opened the map of the school on the floor of the corridor and examined it again. I think I'll go here... I smiled, looking at a chosen location. I wonder how Jane's doing by now... As John went up the right staircase, Jane stood for a few seconds, waiting a bit before going up the other one to the third floor of the building. She knew where she wanted to go - the museum. Which is probably filled with numerous girls willing to have more knowledge... She laughed to herself. Of course not. In a school, museum would be visited by only a few hard-studying students... Jane came to a massive metal door which guarded the way into the museum. She bent to her bag, but took out of it only a sheet of paper and a pen... She was pretty sure she'll find something quite dangerous there inside to apply on her victim. Who - she doesn't know yet... Random is fun... The door opened almost without a noise, letting Jane into a small entry hall of the museum. Her steps echoed as she slowly walked into it and closed the door behind her, looking around... Quiet noises could be heard from the hall to the left from her, dedicated to the antiquity. "Let's see some ancient feeling kill..." - Jane smiled and walked into the antiquity hall... A lonely slim brunette girl was standing there, holding her schoolbag in her hand and looking at the set of Greek swords. Hearing Jane's footsteps, she turned her head and smiled. "You must be from the State Emergency Squad? You're fast..." - "Well, we knew about the drill too," - Jane made a friendly smile and reached for what looked like a list of students. - "So, who are you?" - "Eva Kade, grade 3B," - the girl replied quickly. "Alright..." - Jane made a check on the sheet, and then looked around. - "Are you fond of... weapons?" - "Yeah," - the girl smiled and turned towards a long blade fixed on the wall. - "That's my fondness. I'm thinking of becoming an archeologist when..." As the girl was talking, having turned her back to Jane, the killer quickly reached for another sword behind her back. The nameplate called it "xiphos"... "... So, are we going right now, or?.." - as the girl turned around back to Jane, she stood still for a second, not yet understanding what has just happened and looking with surprise into fierce eyes of her killer. And then she felt the pain... The pain across her belly, which made her gasp and quickly open up her shirt, only to see a deep cut almost from side to side, quickly dripping with blood... "Oh... What are you - aahh!.." Jane shoved her up the wall, tearing the shirt open wide completely and shutting the girl's mouth with her hand. "The object of your hobby, my precious," - whispered Jane to her face as the girl was struggling for getting free, - "is quite dangerous, and you really should have known that." Having just said that, the killer smiled and stabbed Eva deep into the belly with the sword, making her bend over from pain and gaze at Jane in shock... "Are you a sadist or what, to be fond of things that bring so much pain?.." - Slowly, she moved the sword to the side, ripping the girl's tender belly apart and noticing Eva faint significantly... The blood was now almost pouring from a deep and horrific wound, and the girl was screaming in pain as Jane was finishing the cut... "Such things kill people," - whispered the killer slowly, looking into the eyes of her victim, as she was holding her torn belly with both hands, feeling dizzy... She almost vomited, and Jane quickly removed the hand from her mouth. "Oh, you dirty bitch!.." Blood came out from the girl's mouth almost the same moment, and Jane quickly moved aside. There was no need in holding the girl's mouth now, as it was occupied with blood... "What... What are you doing..." - the girl screeched, bending over and holding her stomach, coughing up blood... Even more blood was dripping, almost pouring to the clean floor from a deep cut on her belly, and right as Eva uttered another hard cough with blood, she felt her belly muscles get too strained, which made the wound even worse... She felt something slimy with her fingers... "No..." - that's all she could say through all the blood in her mouth, as she was clearly understanding what is it... Jane stepped away, watching the girl's sufferings as her intestines were slipping out of the wide cut, and Eva finally crashed to the floor, landing into a puddle of her own blood and desperately trying to get the intestines that fell from inside of her, with her hands... "You better don't try, baby, people don't live long after this..." - Jane smiled and granted the girl with a good boot smack in the solar plexus, which clearly made things much worse a little lower and deprived her victim of breath... The girl was wiggling in agony, grabbing her own intestines and gulping for air, but this was the end... Soon she lay in her own blood without a move, only her mouth was open in a desperate reach for air, and blood was still dripping from it and from her deeply cut belly... Jane stepped over her corpse, looking at a sword in her hand and then putting it where it was before. Dark red blood was dripping from its blade... "I like this," - she thought. - "These ancient guys knew how to make something deadly..." Smiling, she picked up a paper and a pen and headed past Eva's body into another hall, opening its closed heavy metal door... ----------------------------------------------------------------- You decide, what will be going on there! - Option A - It's a medieval themed hall, so the kill is medieval-themed. Jane knocks the girl unconscious for a couple of minutes, and then wakes her up by a drop onto the wooden horse. She then continues to torture her by tying additional weight to her legs, heating up the metal sharp edge of the wooden horse etc, until the girl passes out from pain. Jane then wakes her up again - seconds before a death from guillotine. - Option B - It's a hall dedicated to different pendulum and other precise mechanisms (pendulums, gears, etc). The girl here is fond of maths so Jane (knocking her unconscious too) sets her into a trap of these mechanisms. They can completely screw up her body, if she isn't able to decypher the code Jane set up in under a minute. ----------------------------------------------------------------- Again, sorry for the wait, I'll try to not let such things happen more. Also, this story desperately needs at least a couple more opinions too: http://gurochan.net/lit/res/1310.html
Forgot to add: you can describe the girl of your choice also, of course. ;)
Oh man, those both sound great. But I'll go with A, wooden horses are hot.
Hm.... I am a big fan of medieval-themed tortures, but... honestly, B sounds a lot more innovative. So I'm going to vote for B. As far as a smart mathy-girl, well... I think glasses are pretty much a requirement. Beyond that, I have no preferences.
I vote B
I'll go with A!
I vote B and suggest a caucasian human blonde with glasses. for the achine i suggest a puzzle of switches she has to anipulate with her tongue because her ars and legs are trapped in the works. she is slowly drawn and quartered by the machine
A, please.
y idea for the victim is a 16-17 y o blonde caucasian human, tall and leggy with sall per breasts and glasses. I would like to see this girl in either scenario. The scenario I would prefer is being trapped in a machine. The girls arms and legs are trapped in gears that are slowly pullying appart, drawing and quartering her. If her ars and legs are reoved by the gears, her trunk will drop into a swirling mass of gears and blades that will grind her to a pulp. To escape she must flip a series of switches in the correct order with her tonge, each misstep results in the gears dragging her apart speeding up. To further complicate atters a vibrator has been shoved in her virgin pussy and she is being distracted by the pleasure. Ultimately she would be drawn, quartered and pulped just before she was about to achieve her first ever orgasm
B
4 A's, 4 B's! One more day then. =)
B and name the girl Minerva, that's a good nerd girl name...
B please
the museum setting is nice, and i look forward to the next story but can i just ask if the scene after the next be my old request for the arab twin sisters?
I'm not very sure if it's going to be exactly the next one, but it will surely be soon. You see, I just want to keep it smooth and somewhat realistic (not that characters change their decisions 5 times a minute, but they have certain plans - which means, that for example if Jane is in the swimming pool area, she doubtedly will go to the library for one kill and then back to the pool - well, it's just an example). But don't worry, I do remember about your idea and I'm planning to do it as soon as possible - but also I want to keep the storyline reasonable.
>>56 to me Minerva is first of all an ancient goddess's name. :D Note: I completely understand that the machine described in the following piece is sort of very complex and Jane has either to be a tech genius to make it or to have really lots of time, but, you know, it's a fantasy anyway. ;) Also, if you don't understand what numbers Minerva needs to enter, go read some Wikipedia. :) --------------------------------------------------------------------------- Jane slowly walked into another hall and almost bumped into a girl who was standing right next to the door, studying something on the wall. "Err... Hello," - the student looked at her with a bit of surprise, straightening her skirt. - "You're..." - "I'm from the State Emergency Squad," - replied Jane quickly. - "We're evacuating you one by one, and..." - "Yes, I've heard it from the broadcasting system," - the girl nodded. "And you're..." - "I'm Minerva Rosen, class 2B," - the girl answered immediately. The quickness of their conversation confused Jane for a second, and she stepped a couple of steps from the door, reaching for the folder with files of students from her bag and searching for Minerva. Here she is... Pretending she checks something in the sheet, Jane was quickly studying her file. "A" marks all the time, genius in maths and physics... Jane looked around the hall. Mechanical clocks on the wall, complex gear mechanisms and something mechanical in the corner which name she didn't know. "You like mechanics, huh?" - Jane walked closer to the wall, passing the girl. "Yes, I'm into precise mechanisms a lot," - replied Minerva with enthusiasm. - "The maths in it, it's..." Jane wasn't listening. She quickly grabbed a heavy lamp from the nearby shelf and hit the girl right on the head. Minerva silenced the same second, limping to the floor. "Now, what should I do with you, smarty one..." - Jane murmured, looking at the girl. Then at the massive mechanism in the corner of the room... "Hey, wake up!" Minerva was slowly regaining consciousness, and this shout helped her a bit in doing this. The next second, the feeling of her position helped even more. Opening her eyes, she discovered that she has been reliably tied by her arms and legs to the four levers - two high enough and two quite low; and right in front of her face a small numbers pad was fixed. So close that she could lick it if she wanted... "Help!" - these were her first words. - "Somebody help me!" "I wonder, who are you calling?" - Jane smiled, standing a little bit aside so that Minerva could see her from behind the number pad. - "That one and only girl who has been here except you? Well I've got some bad news, she is dead." Jane paused for a while, enjoying the fear written on the face of her victim, as well as her nicely cut body. The girl was stripped down to her bra and panties... "You know, I thought you, like no other, should understand the logic very well. The logic is simple - if I managed to get here, knock you unconscious and place you over there, how in the world can anybody help you?" Jane smiled again, and Minerva swallowed. "Alright, so you may wondering what I am going to do with you... The funny thing is, nothing. I'm going to pull this lever and press this button," - Jane was holding some small switch in her hand. - "And then it will depend on you if you will survive... You're tied to the levers, my precious. When I start the machine, they will begin to slowly pull away, and guess what - your arms and legs will do too. You'll have... I think a minute or one and a half. And this thing in front of you can save you..." Minerva looked at it, noticing the pad had 10 buttons - from "0" to "9". "I think you know what the Fibonacci numbers are, don't you?" Silence. "Do you know?" - Jane asked again in a louder voice. "Y-yes..." - "Great. So you should enter them, one by one, starting with 1 and 1, and up to 4181. Use your tongue, darling," - Jane smiled, herself liking this idea a lot. - "Have you been with a girl? It would be easier for you then... - ah, yes, I forgot, you haven't been with anyone yet, I noticed that when I was undressing you," - Jane laughed quietly to herself. - "So, just enter them with your tongue, one by one, no spaces or anything... Oh, and one more little thing. Listen to the feelings of your body. Notice anything?" Minerva now felt there was something in her panties, right near her pussy... "Ah, I see it by your face," - Jane smiled. - "It's a butterfly vibrator. I think it will help you concentrate on your task... And if not, well... You know, dying in your orgasm isn't a bad death overall." Jane came closer to the mechanism with Minerva trapped in it. "Now, this thing you don't see because you can't bow your head much, but there, right under you, are a lot of gears. Just think of what's gonna happen to your body when a couple of your limbs get torn off... Anyway, I hope you can count well and I really do hope you can survive." - Jane tried to make a serious face, but eventually laughed with the last words. "Alright. Fibonacci, start with 1 and 1. Get to 4181, and you're free." - She put her hand on the lever and suddenly pulled it down, together with enabling the vibrator in Minerva's panties. - "Go!" The gears started rotating with a horrible mechanical sound, causing Minerva to shriek and instinctively wiggle a couple of seconds in her trap, but then, quickly realising that she HAD to do this, pull her tongue and touch "1" on the number pad. And again. And move to "2", then "3" and "5", as the gears came to the full speed and started to slowly pull apart the girl's arms and legs while rotating under her, flashing their sharp edges... "8", "1", "3", "2", "1"... Jane was standing some steps aside, watching Minerva desperately trying to save her life. This isn't a very hard task actually. It isn't a hard task at all when nothing is pulling you apart, nothing vibrates right next to your pussy and when you have a pencil and a sheet of paper... Minerva didn't. So it wasn't much of a surprise for Jane when the pad blipped suddenly and the gears seemed to start rotating faster... "Oh oh!" - she cried, trying to make her voice sound louder than the mechanism. "Reenter the number, darling!" - she smiled. Every mistake would give Minerva less and less time before the machine does its ugly work... Minerva wasn't crying. She desperately tried not to cry, since with tears in her eyes she wouldn't be able to see the numbers... And this feeling between her legs, this pleasant, unbelievably pleasant feeling, that was messing up her thoughts... 144 plus 233 is 379... Beep! No, no, 377... The muscles of her legs were already strained as much as possible, as her mistakes made the levers rise quicker and already stretch the ropes tied to her legs... "6", "1", "0", "1"... Beep! The machine started to work even more faster, making Minerva scream loudly as she could clearly feel her shoulders be dislocated in just seconds... Jane was watching it with a strange emotion on her face. She liked pure pain more than dismemberment, but yet she was clearly enjoying the force of the machine excel the girl's mind... And the machines do work dirty. But that's a fair price... Minerva uttered a wild scream, when with a disgusting sound her right arm got completely dislocated by the force of the lever, now holding only on the tension of her skin... The pain in her joints and the exciting feeling rising up from her groin were completely driving her crazy... "8", "7", "1", "6" - "Aaaaah!" The gears were now rotating as fast as Jane could imagine, quickly pulling apart her legs and completely tearing away her right arm... Minerva was screaming in pain, still desperately trying to enter the last numbers, but now this was even harder since she lost one arm and hardly could balance without her face touching the pad... "5", "9", "7", "2"... No, not "5", wrong key! The ropes holding her arm and legs were so strained that they were almost making her split her legs horizontally... "Aaaaaaahhh!!" The girl was crying wildly, as she could feel her left leg getting torn apart... "Nooo!..." A disgusting sound of tearing flesh again, and Minerva was now twitching in agony, only tied by her left arm and right leg, with no other limbs left... Jane nodded to herself and turned her back, slowly walking away and hearing Minerva's agonizing screams. She didn't want to see the 50 kg of bloody and fleshy mess get grinded by the gears, but this wasn't the real reason - more than this, she didn't want to be completely covered in the girl's blood, which, as she assumed, could well happen if she stood close enough. Of course there wasn't a chance that Minerva could enter the last numbers, half-dismembered, agonizing from pain and blood loss and unable to catch the number pad with her tongue... A sound of tearing flesh again could be heard as Jane was walking out of the hall, and the next second a very short desperate cry of horror - and then the ugly noise of the gears that finally got their bloody lunch. Jane closed the door behind her, letting the machine turn the girl into a powder on blood, pieces of flesh and bones. Raw force of the machine beat the genius of the human mind. --------------------------------------------------------------------------- As probably preparing the machine took quite some time, we can assume that John was faster. He makes a warning call to tell Jane he goes to the gym area. (as you voted in the poll), so Jane decides to visit the swimming pool area. So where does she go now? - Option A - To the lockers (changing room) belonging to the pool. As the lockdown happened during the middle of the lesson, there aren't many girls (I'd say maybe 1 or 2, but I won't making an exact count - because maybe you will want her to stay in this area for some more time, for example). You decide, who she encounters there (since some time has passed, the girl probably changed back into her school uniform because she hears about the lockdown, but you can come up with some interesting ideas). - Option B - To the sauna area, as suggested by heirophant in >>16. The girls and events there are as he described; the killer is female plus she clearly has lesbian nature so she CAN fuck the girls, don't worry about that. ;-) - Option C - Instead, we follow John's actions for a while, who went to the gym area. In this case, I want to start with a kill completely of my own - this said, by choosing this option you let me continue a story in a way that you don't know before the actual story. Sort of a "unknown" element. I'll draw an approximate map of the swimming pool area soon to clear up possible confusion about "where can Jane go from where".
http://s51.radikal.ru/i134/1008/7f/5d8c292f1353.png The awesome swimming pool area map. :)
B, of course :-)
I vote for C. Jane's had a turn. :)
option d, john gos to the doctors office and kills the previously mentioned Caucasian redhead
c
A; school uniforms :)
C. and i want john to rape one of them already
They're all valid options but I'll go with A. Nice job on the last section by the way, it was the best part yet!
Wow, so many different votes. OK, one more day, and I'll continue. heirophant, just so that you know - I don't forget about your idea even if another option will be chosen, I'll come back to it asap, but I need to respect the vote result.
C, Jane had her turn. I like the /uknown/ element idea too :).
Also, I would love to see some beautiful redhead killed. I am very keen on them. Maybe I will even find the time to think out some interesting way of killing :).
As I agree with uknown anon posting before, I would like John to visit the doctors office and finding a half-naked caucasian redhead waiting for the doctor. I suggest John to sedate her with some kind of sedatives found in the office/infirmary, then tie her up to the table and perform an autopsy on her, as she wokes up. :) It is up to you.
I'm unfortunately unexpectedly busy atm, expect the next part a little bit later (but soon, maybe within a day). I want to warn that my "unknown" / "surprise" thing isn't actually very gory, it's more sadistic and revolves around my personal fetishes.
Great! gore and sadism, this is why we are here :). cant wait to read it =p
b
Aaaargh, damn it, guys. :) I've already started the C variant, because up to my post 77, there were 2A, 2B, 4C. And now there's 5B. What should I do?
continue the c then >.<
Go with C, and save B for the next round. :)
btw, what was your guys favorite kill so far? i liked the one were john stomped that bitches stomach until shes started vomiting blood
I like the elf girl, wish there was more of a force rape and "big" endng for her tho.
i like the elf one too:). but that one with the history enthusiast was good too =p
What?! are you serious? why? if i can improve anything or i did something wrong... please tell me! if you want me to get lost, whatever, just please continue this story, it is really awesome, even though it is kinda sick. what happened, for gods sake?
Hey, this is me. And that was some troll writing under my name. Not even to mention that at THAT time I wasn't home at all. To all: actually I really had some problems lately which unfortunately stopped me from writing more (I'd say, personal things), but the next part IS coming soon. Maybe tomorrow. If you don't believe it, you can maybe ask the admin to see the IP address of my messages and of that troll.
A little bit more exact just to avoid misunderstanding: yes, I do have some slight personal problems, which actually don't let me "dig" into the story well these last days. But it will be over very soon, I just can't tell when exactly. One of the following days. You see, of course I could've continued without "digging much in it", but I prefer to do something of good quality rather than of poor - and for this, I need this soon-to-happen good day to come. And don't mind >>91 it's not me.
o my god who would think of such of a thing and i say c
name:tootie height:5'6 race:human build:husky breasts:big talent:poetry bio: she is loved by every one in the school. she has one enemy missy(i'll get her later) but she has a double life as a slut hey Ffreq if you like her i'll do the enemy ☺
o my god who would think of such of a thing You. ;)
who me
I think it would be funny to have Jane and John shot by the police who were called by regretful teachers at the end.
ya i agree
I've got some awesome news guys. After almost 2 weeks I'm finally back. :) I really am sorry for this gigantic delay, but I hope you can understand that sometimes shit happens in a life. However, the problem is, fortunately, completely gone now. I'll be writing quite frequently here now. With this said, pls don't abandon this thread thinking it will die soon - it won't. Speaking of J&J being shot to death - I still hesitate about the ultimate ending; I have an idea about the police too, but... well, alright, we'll decide it later. When the story will be coming to an end, which means not very soon. ;) --------------------------------------------------------------------- So, as we agreed, - Option C - Instead, we follow John's actions for a while, who went to the gym area. In this case, I want to start with a kill completely of my own - this said, by choosing this option you let me continue a story in a way that you don't know before the actual story. Sort of a "unknown" element. And because heirophant's option B was sort of thrown away, which I feel sorry for, I would like as an apology for that to start Jane's adventures in swimming pool area exactly with this. So, when we will be returning to Jane, I'll start her story there with twins. Is that ok? --------------------------------------------------------------------- ... After some hesitation and studying the school map, I finally picked my destination. The gym area... When I was a schoolboy myself, we didn't have a big one. This school does. Several sections; almost the whole southern part of the school was devoted to keeping fit. The volleyball playground, the fitness halls, special indoor track-and-field room... It's like it was perfectly designed for a kill. I smiled, studying the map of it again. Yes, I certainly do know where to go... The door separating the gym area from the other parts of the school opened for me almost without a sound. Damn, they must have paid much for such a security system, not even realizing back then that the security system one day would make the school a prison and a playground for the two of us... I walked along the empty corridor, unlocking the door to the teachers' set of rooms. Some inventory was stored here... I might want to take a look at it later. I followed through some small rooms full of balls, mats and ropes, to find myself in a small room just close to the volleyball playground, where the teacher would be sitting working with students' papers or just watching the game. Another turn of the key... Just as I thought. Lacking some other things to do while being locked inside, the girls were playing. They didn't even notice me the first five seconds or so, which let me briefly look at them. It looks they're 3rd grade... The girls weren't wearing school uniforms this time. Instead, they were all dressed much more conveniently... Tight shirts and blouses, short shorts or sometimes skirts... The game stopped for a while when they noticed me, smiling and standing in the door of the teacher's room with some papers in my hand. "Hi everyone," - I started my greeting speech again. - "As you may have guessed, I'm from the State Emergency Squad. We'll evacuate you all slowly one by one, but first," - I looked at each of them, - "I'll need one of you for just five minutes to help me with the papers. You know, I need to know who is absent today and things like that." - "Let me do this," - said the girl on the right from me, whom I didn't notice at first. She was sitting there with a couple more girls, taking a brief break from the game, with a towel on her shoulders and wearing just white tight T-shirt and some really short and tight green shorts... And she was elf. "Yes, sure, let's go in here, there's a table inside," - I pointed to the teacher's room and followed her there. Oh yeah, I surely know what I'm gonna do with her... Just as we walked in, I closed the door behind us and reached for a file in my hand with the lists of students. "So, what class are you?" - "We're 3D," - the elf girl smiled. I gave her the corresponding sheet and pointed to a table. "Here you have the pen... Will you mark who's here and who's absent?" - "Yes, sure," - the girl took a pen and bent slightly over the table to fill in the paper. I was standing behind her, looking at her... Damn, she was gorgeous. Really nice hips, hidden only by her very tight shorts - I was sure she didn't wear panties under them... Long tanned legs, slim figure in a tight shirt, medium-to-long dark hair and a towel on her shoulders... Some sweat was dripping from her neck, but very little and not disgusting in any sense. It was only a sign that she has been playing just recently... "And who are you?" - "I'm Leira Inveillin," - answered the girl, finishing the list and turning back to me. - "Should I mark myself in the list?.." I didn't respond. When she turned back, I was standing right behind her - and slammed my knee right in her crotch, right between her legs that were, unfortunately for her, just slightly apart... Leira didn't even cry - she opened her mouth in a silent scream of shock, bending over and grabbing her pussy... Huh, so I was right with that girl. A blow to the groin is one thing, but direct hit right there is another... Taking her by her shoulders, I rudely pushed her to the wall - and as she hit it, for a moment taking her hands away from her hips, I followed with another blow - this time with the nose of my shoe slamming right into her pussy, making her squeak quietly and grab her pussy through the clothing, gasping and sliding down the wall... The pain was so strong that tears appeared in her eyes, and finally she uttered such a painful howl that it sent chills down my spine... She pressed her thighs tightly to each other, both protecting herself and trying to calm down the pain, howling and holding her crotch all the time... "Heelp!..." - She tried to scream, but it wasn't even loud... I smiled. "Why do all of you always call for help? I've killed two already, and no one of you realized no one can help you..." Leira was looking at me both in horror and in pain, sitting down there at the wall... Smiling, I came closer. "Get up." She tried, I really did see she tried, but she couldn't... I grabbed her by her arms, lifting into the air and shoving up the wall again. Now, she could stand. But barely, as the pain between her legs was almost too much for her... "Consider this was an experiment," - I whispered to her long ear. - "I was just testing if it's true that your long-ear race is so sensitive down there... Well, I have an answer." - With a smile as much ominous as I could make, I quickly reached for her shorts and grabbed her crotch. Just the way you grab someone's balls, but this time holding her pussy through the clothing and squeezing it... The elf screamed wildly, crying from pain and twitching by the wall, desperately trying to press her thighs together and reach for my arm with hers - but she understood everything, when I put another hand on a knife on my belt, hidden under the coat... Looking into her face, I squeezed her pussy through the clothing even harder - her scream reached a new octave, as she was almost agonizing from the worst pain an elf can feel... I was holding her like this for a minute, maybe, squeezing her harder and harder, until she seemed to begin to lose consciousness... With a rude move I threw her down the floor. She fell on her back, her shirt raised a little from it, revealing a part of her slim belly... But this wasn't what was interesting me at that moment. With her, I really wanted to finish it the way that is a nightmare for any elf... I grabbed her legs by ankles - she didn't even fight back, all she could do is moan from pain, crying and holding her crotch... I lifted her legs in the air and spread them - and she understood. She understood her horrible fate... A scream of fear could be heard right before I stomped heavily on her groin - and the scream turned into a wildest cry of pain I ever heard... One more stomp, I almost jumped with one foot on her crotch, and Leira bended her body upward in an agony of pain... She wasn't even protecting herself anymore - fingers on her hands were twitching, as she was literally shaking on the floor... I looked at her legs again. Beautiful legs, with them she could have been a model, a pornstar, or just some beautiful elf... Too bad for her that her life is coming to an end. One more stomp, this time as heavy as if I fell on her - and I could hear a crack of her pelvis bone... My guess was confirmed by such a scream that it almost deafed me, and Leira twitched wildly on the floor, going literally crazy from the ultimate, unbearable pain... I don't know what's happened to me. It could be called rage... I kicked, stomped, kneed her crotch violently, until with each blow I could feel as if I was beating a sack with small parts of bones. Her pelvis was literally destroyed, and I even missed a moment when her consciousness left her forever... Her mouth was still opened in a silent scream, her eyes were almost rolled out, and her shorts were now slowly turning red... I dropped her legs, going to another end of the room and breathing deeply. I almost lost control of myself. I shouldn't, actually, this is dangerous. But on the other hand... What a feeling... I looked at the elf again, then came closer, grabbed her by hands and pulled her body away, into one of the rooms with the inventory. I don't need the girls to notice her body through the open door into the volleyball room... I returned into the teacher's room and breathed deeply a few times again, calming myself. I didn't even realize at first what else I was feeling... A lust. I could clearly feel I had a boner now... Thank god my jeans could almost hide it. Just for some seconds... I came closer to the table, checked the list of students, and reached for my file with all the information about them. So, class 3D... I need to rape one of them. I want to. I will. But who?.. --------------------------------------------------------------------- So, John picks a victim for a rape - he invites her into this room, as if he evacuates another girl, and it happens there. One little notice - I don't want her to be an elf, since, as I mentioned, elf girls have very strong squirting orgasms so it would be quite hard for John to cum inside her. Everything else about the victim - I'm open for suggestions. But what happens next? He need to kill her after that. - Option A - He tells her to bend over again, takes his pistol and fires right into her vagina several times. - Option B - The rape itself is happening not in the teacher's room itself, but in a small room next to it with washstand (I'm not sure how it's called, it's a sink for washing hands - for teachers, for example if they were holding a dirty ball and then need to write something, they need to wash their hands). So, he takes the girl there and rapes her while drowning her head in this sink and letting her breathe some air sometimes, and when he cums into her, he completely drowns the girl. I'll come up with a map of the gym area too very soon. VOTE! :) And sorry again for the giant absence. I wish it didn't happen.
A. and i am really happy to see you back. amazing story :)
I really am happy to be back too. :) Hope I didn't lose too many readers. And if I won't be busy tomorrow, there will be a next part here too: http://gurochan.net/lit/res/1310.html (which sort of drowned for a little because of the same problem, but I don't forget about it, of course)
B sounds fun.
Hoooray! Good to hear that :). I liked that "bloody beach" thread very much. btw, have you ever thought about writing (semi)professionally and to publish some stories or something like that? your english is really excellent, you could beat even my favorite Clive Barker with your approach. But I guess you have too much work to do this. anyways, i love this and i am looking forward to some more. =p
Aargh! sorry, i really didnt want to post it three times! my apologies to everyone.
a and heres a suggestion that i made : name:tootie height:5'6 race:human build: skinny breasts:big talent:football virgin: yes she is the top dog in gym and can throw a football really hard you can use that against her
Loving this btw. I think I'll vote for option A. Personally, later on, I'd like to see one of the girls survive and get away, somehow alerting others in a room but not everyone in the school. Maybe it's a door you can open from only one side, so when she goes in there, she locks herself and everyone else in who were already locked in. I'd love some male victims for Jane, but I know it ain't gonna happen in an all girls school :P
a, and i can't wait for the one based on my idea. i may not be able to respond to it for a while though i'm going to be on vacation with limited internet access for a while...
I'm voting for B, and i'm hoping the girl is a virgin, skinny, and if it happens to be elf instead of human, john could rape her in the vag, then uses her juices to fuck her in the ass.(while the blood from her vag drips into the water)